Kain
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Post by Kain on Nov 23, 2005 23:24:13 GMT -5
Here it is: I wrote this one about an year ago...Most of the people that read it share that this is "the most depressing thing" they've ever read. Well, when going through difficult times it's better to have somebody to share it with. But during that time I was so alone- I didn't have anybody/thank God now I do have /. So the only friend that could "listen" to me without arguing or blaming me for my thoughts was the white piece of paper...and that's what came up... My Sorrow I am staying alone in the room and I am crying. The sorrow like a thief is stealing inside of me, I can feel the pain, burning like a fire it's hurting, I'm screaming: "Can't you see me?" Laying down on the floor, I can't stop thinking, I can't stop willing to die. To get away from the sorrow, to pull my life out of the horror. Oh, I can't go on! The sorrow is like a salt in my wounds- I can feel it burning. It's like Gothic metal sounds- I can hear it burbling. That sorrow. Oh, that sorrow! It's like a frost on a flower for me. I am sitting for more than an hour, thinking how just for once I can be free. Is that how my life going to be? God, please, answer to me! Take away the pain, take away the sorrow; I ask you- set my heart and soul free! And I like this poem as do I like all your poems.
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Post by fenris on Nov 24, 2005 3:01:50 GMT -5
Thanks for sharing. The people here will be able to appreciate such works liek this. I have many poems myself most which are fuled by anger more than anything.
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Post by uriel on Nov 24, 2005 3:37:04 GMT -5
Thanks for sharing. The people here will be able to appreciate such works liek this. I have many poems myself most which are fuled by anger more than anything. Please, share... I am interested in reading some of your poems.
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Post by Arkhon Arkhozh on Nov 24, 2005 3:52:54 GMT -5
Thanks too. It was an interesting poem and something to think about. Feel free to share more especially more in that style. I have no poems of my own, but instead I think about aspects of the world, perhaps Ill post some of my personal ramblings once in awhile.
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Post by fenris on Nov 25, 2005 0:37:19 GMT -5
I've got my stuff dug up just got to go through it and retype it up.
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Kain
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Post by Kain on Nov 25, 2005 0:49:53 GMT -5
Sounds good.
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Post by uriel on Nov 25, 2005 0:51:04 GMT -5
Thanks too. It was an interesting poem and something to think about. Feel free to share more especially more in that style. I have no poems of my own, but instead I think about aspects of the world, perhaps Ill post some of my personal ramblings once in awhile. No problem. I can post as many poems as you want me to...I have plenty of them. The next one is dedicated to the times when I've been so lost, and blind, and hurt. It's devoted to the times when I wished I was never born... and I felt I was one big mistake... I had many of "those" times, so all that is left for me to do is to cry my pain out to God. He is the ONLY ONE, who never failed me and no matter what His love never changed/ I don't know how many of you have such believes, or how many even do believe that God exists, but I do, so please try to understand me.../ Here is the poem... Heal me Brake it, brake it, I wish to be free This life would be useless for me...
if you're not right here when I am alone with my fear All I need is to surrender to your will Your love is all I wish to feel. I am helpless, come and lift me up; I am surrounded with darkness, come and wake me up; I feel my heart is burning with pain and I can see that's all in vain.
God, please, I am choking with sorrow; please, get my life out of the horror. Why is it so hard to walk in truth? Why am I like a cut root?
God...! Hear my crying in the night. My mind and my flesh are in fight. I can feel the fire burning inside; God, come and heal me tonight!
10/12/2004
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Kain
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Post by Kain on Nov 25, 2005 0:55:21 GMT -5
Wow great. I wish I could express feelings like that.
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Post by Arkhon Arkhozh on Nov 25, 2005 14:06:21 GMT -5
Definately an expressive poem. its good.
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Post by uriel on Nov 25, 2005 14:57:15 GMT -5
Definately an expressive poem. its good. Thank you! See, according to me, when a person writes a poem where s(he) expresses pain, depression, it is very easy for that poem to be a "good one" as long as the person let his/ her pain itself be expressed. This apparently would happen in times of pain... I find it very hard to write about something like this/ let's say it's a requirement in school/ when actually I feel no pain, but I feel happy... I had such situation last year/ I will explain to you in detail when I see you in Astro on Wednesday/. You had to see my funny-looking face wishing to have a funny speech making the whole class roll on the floor , but my mind was "troubled" with creating a poem expressing pain. I just wanted somebody to make me mad..., the teacher to write me a detention for smiling..., joking... whatever it has to be done to change my positive mood, but didn't happen..., so the poem was terrible...! I WON'T POST IT, I promise... ;D
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Post by Arkhon Arkhozh on Nov 27, 2005 1:37:11 GMT -5
There would be no harm in posting it here. But if you don't want to I can understand. I think you may be correct that negative state of mind can produce better poetry.
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Post by uriel on Nov 27, 2005 2:21:00 GMT -5
There would be no harm in posting it here. But if you don't want to I can understand. I think you may be correct that negative state of mind can produce better poetry. Well, according to me "negative state of mind" is not always the best factor of "good poetry". If you wish to say to someone how much you love him/her and you have a negative state of mind/ I don't think on a first place you'll think about sharing love words with this person.../, you will not be able to create a good love poem... That's the reason I think that depending on what kind of mood we are in we'll create a poem reflecting that mood, those emotions, feelings and so on.../ I hope you got what I am saying. I love to confuse people... with my "beautiful" English... / The above is describing the way I am when I am writing. Believe it or nor there are people that think that, as you said, "the negative state of mind can produce better poetry." I do believe this is true for some individuals, but the interesting part is how they're doing this... How could a person be depressed, mad, with "negative state of mind" and at the same time write about how beautiful the morning is..., how blue the sky..., and don't make me keep going. Anybody has any explanation? Be my guest. I'll be happy to know how can I shift like that... this is going to be helpful... ...like imagine your mom is yelling at you and you're coming up with the nicest words like " Oh, mother... I love you so..., and even when you're mad, I think I love you more..." when you actually want to grab something heavy and... you know...! Hehe, a joke. I was just trying to give you a "good" example... Yeah... ;D
p.s. Let me know how many hours you're gonna be reading this...
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Post by fenris on Nov 27, 2005 2:27:37 GMT -5
This had devoloped into quite the interesting conversation. I don't know about anyone else but I can only write when the desire hits me. Then my work practically does itself. So weither or not I'm in a lousy mood means little when I write.
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Kain
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Post by Kain on Nov 27, 2005 19:52:15 GMT -5
I don't write poetry that much mainly because I always saw poetry as a way to express feelings or emotions. And I usually don't express feeings and emotions to many people. For me to write a poem it takes the right time, mood, and all that.
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Post by uriel on Nov 29, 2005 0:00:13 GMT -5
In order to write a poem or create some piece of art a person should have an inspiration? Something or someone should inspire him/her? Fenris, you said that you write "when the desire hits" you. As I am thinking about this, I realize that it's not the person that inspires you, but your desire that makes you devote a poem... a song... to him/her. Of course, the whole idea of creating such thing as, lets say- a love poem- is based on the feelings you have to that particular individual/ I am giving this just as an example/. But as I am thinking deeper, I am reaching to your point..." I write when the desire hits me". If it's the person that inspires me, for instance, I will be too busy writing poems...24-7...it'll be a continuous action... Sometimes I don't write with months...even if I have a person that I have deep feelings to, I am writing and devoting poems to him when the desire "hits" me...Fernis, you make me think... That's good!
But still I don't have an answer to the question: "How could you create a love poem when you're full of hate?" or "How could you describe and come up with the most beautiful words to describe how beautiful the life is when you can't wait to be gone...to be dead...you hate that life...? How do you think this shift is possible?
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